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  1. Ayvinn wrote: 03/02/2019 at 10:11pm.

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  1. Here it is:
  2. Ma’am, sir,
  3. I will soon be graduating with a degree in computer engineering, and I wish to continue my studies in this direction. I would like to inform you of my wish to join the Master of Science, Technology and Health with a specialization in computer science at your university.
  4. During the years of higher education and thanks to internships in companies, I was able to refine my professional project, make it grow and put it into practice.

    Joining your master’s program would allow me to deepen my knowledge and acquire a high level of skills recognized by all and would open the doors to the profession of computer engineer that I find exciting.
  5. Organized, rigorous and assiduous, I look forward to my training in your master’s program with the greatest motivation and I am determined to organize myself well to excel in your establishment.

    Thank you for your attention to my application. I remain at your entire disposal for any further information you may require. Please accept, Madam and Sir, the assurances of my highest consideration.
  6. Ayvinn wrote: 06/02/2019 at 8:07pm.

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  1. Carhiboux wrote: 07/02/2019 at 10:48 am

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  1. Hi,
  2. already, if you gave a little context, we might be able to help you a little more.
  3. Second, even without context, I find your letter far too generic. It’s like you’re gonna send him to 50 different masters just by changing the title of the master.
  4. If I were you, I’d personalize it a lot more. Why did you choose this particular master’s degree (subject not taught elsewhere, recognised teachers, etc.)?
  5. Then your letter is full of banalities seen and reviewed… frankly, it’s absolutely average. Not really bad, but not really good either.
  6. Ayvinn wrote: 07/02/2019 at 4:02pm.

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  1. Thanks, I’ll try to personalize it.
  2. Ayvinn wrote: 07/02/2019 at 8:37pm.

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  2. Hey, guys,
  3. already, if you gave a little context, we might be able to help you a little more.
  4. Second, even without context, I find your letter far too generic. It’s like you’re gonna send him to 50 different masters just by changing the title of the master.
  5. If I were you, I’d personalize it a lot more. Why did you choose this particular master’s degree (subject not taught elsewhere, recognised teachers, etc.)?
  6. Then your letter is full of banalities seen and reviewed… frankly, it’s absolutely average. Not really bad, but not really good either.

  7. here after the modification you think what?
  8. Dear Sir/Madam,

    I am currently in the fifth year of the computer engineering cycle at the Oujda School of Advanced Engineering and I am sending you my application form for the Master of Science, Technology and Health with a specialization in computer science.
  9. During the years of higher education and thanks to internships in companies, I was able to refine my professional project, make it grow and put it into practice, and I wish to continue my studies in this direction.

    Your university, which is a centre of research and teaching, will help me to deepen my knowledge and acquire a high level of skills recognised by all. Moreover, the specialisations taught in the second year of the Master’s degree will give me access to the world of work and open the doors to the profession of computer engineer, which I find fascinating.
  10. Organized, rigorous and assiduous, I look forward to my training in your master’s program with the greatest motivation and I am determined to organize myself well to excel in your establishment.

    Thank you for your attention to my application. I remain at your entire disposal for any further information you may require. Please accept, Madam and Sir, the assurances of my highest consideration.
  11. I’m only allowed 1500 letters. I couldn’t add more.
  12. Carhiboux wrote: 08/02/2019 at 10:44am

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  1. It’s still hyper generic, actually…
  2. You could still send this to any of the masters…
  3. You talk about your career plan, but you don’t actually say anything about it at all. What is it? Mystery…
  4. You mean the specific teachings? Which ones? Mystery…
  5. Pod44v2 wrote: 08/02/2019 at 11:17am

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  1. Hi Ayvinn,
  2. I agree with Carhiboux on the generic side of your letter. But beyond that, I put myself in the place of the person who receives your letter, and I don’t understand the project…
  3. You say that you will soon have an engineering degree (so a bac+5), and in your letter you talk about doing a master’s again (so we’ll say doing 2 years again to still have a simple bac+5) as if it is required to find a job. Apart from your initial engineering training, you should have no trouble finding one (especially since you’ve done several internships).
  4. You need to be more motivated to do this particular Master’s again: a specific field that really attracts you? Anything you want to learn during your internship?
  5. Good luck
    ;)
  6. Ayvinn wrote: 08/02/2019 at 5:01pm.

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  2. Hi, Ayvinn,
  3. I agree with Carhiboux on the generic side of your letter. But beyond that, I put myself in the place of the person who receives your letter, and I don’t understand the project…
  4. You say that you will soon have an engineering degree (so a bac+5), and in your letter you talk about doing a master’s again (so we’ll say doing 2 years again to still have a simple bac+5) as if it is required to find a job. Apart from your initial engineering training, you should have no trouble finding one (especially since you’ve done several internships).
  5. You need to be more motivated to do this particular Master’s again: a specific field that really attracts you? Anything you want to learn during your internship?
  6. Good luck
    ;)

  7. Thank you, I’ve changed all the context of the letter. What do you think?
  8. Ma’am, sir,
  9. I am currently in the fifth year of the computer engineering cycle at the Oujda School of Advanced Engineering, and I have the honour of sending you my application in the hope of receiving a favourable opinion to join the first year of the Science, Technology and Health Master’s degree in Computer Science.
  10. I am passionate about computers in general, in recent years I have had the opportunity to acquire a lot of knowledge in this field through training and internships, but this has not fulfilled my ambitions: I would like to continue in this field while following the current trend and discovering other aspects of computer science.

    Your institution offers the training that suits me and that meets my ambitions, it will not only allow me to deepen my knowledge, but will also give me the opportunity to follow the course Security of Information Systems given in the 2nd year of the master’s degree that really interests me.

    I am therefore convinced that this training will guarantee me the career I have so longed for and allow me to achieve my ambitions.
  11. Thank you for your attention to my application. Yours sincerely
  12. Pod44v2 wrote: 11/02/2019 at 2:28pm

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  1. Hi Ayvinn,
  2. It’s already better, I would have still brought the fact that it’s the Security of Computer Systems path that interests you particularly quickly in the letter (but that’s only my opinion). You could also give a little more detail about why this aspect of computing interests you (compared to other things you may have touched on in internships for example). Then I understand the problem of the maximum number of characters to be respected ^^
  3. Otherwise I noticed a few mistakes, on the fly:
  4. Ma’am, sir,
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  12. .An recent years, I have had the opportunity to acquire a great deal of knowledge in this field through training and internships, but this has not fulfilled my ambitions: I would like to continue in this field while following the current trend and by
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  14. discovering others aspects in computer science.

    Your institution offers the training that suits me and that meets my ambitions, it will not only allow me to deepen my knowledge, but will also give me the opportunity to follow the course Security of Information Systems given in the 2nd year of the master’s degree that really interests me.

    I am therefore convinced that this training will guarantee me the career I have so longed for and allow me to achieve my ambitions.
  15. Thank you for your attention to my application. Yours sincerely
  16. Good luck
    ;)